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Critique: TMNT OC- Magdalene Hamato
Magdalene Hamato is the fiction daughter of Donatello and April, beautifully created a lot of time was spent in making her perfect. I must complement her name, it is something that sticks out to me. The name "Magdalene" is hebrew which means "high tower" a beautiful name for a beautiful OC.
Magdalene, or rather Maggie, is depicted with red hair like her mother but with a light green skin much like her father. She also has a gap, in some pictures but not in others so I do not quite know how to judge her on that. If she does I find it to much like her father, without it she seems more herself.
Watching this mischievous child grow up perfectly is my favorite part about her, FlashyFashionFraud grants us the wonderful opportunity to watch her beautiful OC come to life and grow up with us as if she's our own.
Maggie's downfall is her lack of style, most OC have a traditional look, since FlashyFashionFraud gives us the wonderful opportunity to watch her grow up she lacks a certa
TMNT Alien Species: Heiwa'Teki
Race - Heiwa'Teki
Politics - The Planet Is Run By A Congress Who Are Elected By The People.
Plantet - Name: Koibito. Location: Quadrant 666 Sector 3
Interest - The Heiwa'Teki People Are A Peaceful Loving Tribe Who Are Dedicated To Math, Science, Art and Music. They Are Dedicated To Finding Universal Peace With All Nations, Tribes and Planets Around The Galaxy. They Commonly Visit Other Planets, Such As Earth, To Study The People, The Plants, The Lifestyle And The Animals.
Looks - Males Are Blue And Females Are Pink. No Hair. Giant Dark Hallow Eyes. When A Female Heiwa'Teki Is Pregnant Her Stomach Turns Purple If The Baby Is Male, If The Baby Is Female Her Stomach Turns Red.
Special Skill Or Power - Shapeshifting
Additional Nots - The Heiwa'Teki Have No Prisons Or Court Systems, They Are A Self Sufficient People Who Do Not Allow Immigration For They Fear Other Aliens May Disturb The Peace They Have Worked So Ha
Critique: TMNT Reboot
Xan-Seyro's world is a reboot series often times referred as "TMNT: Into the Apocalypse"
This series takes place in a future where the Kra'ang had arrived on earth, from a different dimension to mutate the human population; and the process is slowly progressing into many enemy mutants. In the series April is 15-17 in this, however her design is still in development, whenever if it's the "schoolgirl" look or a more present-day look. The Kraang, or what it's called "Kra'ang" are not robots, but are shape shifting-humanoids that were inspired by the Shoggoth of of Cthulhu Mythos.
A more darker development of the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles 2012, filled with more violence and gore, if you are into the angst style then this series is for you. The different style Xan-Seyro takes makes her characters look more deranged and evil though April carries a more innocent look then her 2k12 counterpart. Though for an angst style world your character design may be good but it has a
Apriltello Versus Capril
Casey will not steal April from Donnie, Donnie never had April, why do people act like April is Donatello's life? There is so much more to Donatello, people pretend to be his fans but demean him by pretending April is his only train of thought. He has so much potential but a love life with April is not one of them. Anyways Capril is one of the most canon ships out there, from comics to movies down to cartoons, so why is everyone surprised Casey has come in? He is as canon as April and the Turtles.
For Donnie in the long run a crush is nothing more then a crush, and in the end you get crushed. It'll be a good life lesson for him. Also Rob Paulsen said Donnie will pick up his game when Casey comes, which means Donnie feels Casey is moving in on April and April is excepting his affections. All of Donnie's brothers say he has no chance with April and April consider's all the turtles, and Donnie, as her brothers.
Sure Rob Paulsen ships Apriltello but th
Literature Critique: Greater Rewards
As a any author your job is to grab the attention of the reader in the first sentence or two, the first line in HorrorRuby7's story, Greater Rewards, is "They hadn’t been fighting an enemy that they’d known for years. No, they fought a threat far bigger. Much more deadly. And in an insanely bitter irony, they fought alongside their enemies. In a twisted fate, the humans fought alongside them as well."
It instantly grabs your attention and obviously shows we are now in a different time line then the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle world we enjoy on our television. In this apocalyptic time line a war between mutants, aliens and humans has broken out.
The story is lacking a cover, often times covers are the face of a fanfictions and since this one does not have one it may be a reason why people have yet to read it more. I would highly recommend getting a cover, whether she finds a piece of art that fits to the story or higher someone to make her one, either way
Art Critique: LadyIronBat
LadyIronBat's art style is very TMNT 2k12, but it mixes a slightly more chibi or childish aspect to it, in which I enjoy. Her traditional art is beautiful, her shading is very nice. The color choice for the turtles skin and April's hair is very good. The anatomy on the other hand is in need of a little work. Often times the heads come out to large or the bodies are unproportioned but then again that happens to the best of us. I do have to complement the way she chooses to draw the turtles, you can tell each and everyone of them apart and she properly gives them the correct skin color, tone and look. April and Karai's skin tone is also worth applauding over, the color's chosen for each individual character is unparalleled.
In the end tone and shading is very good, her anatomy needs some work and to help with the clarity of the art I would recommend getting a scanner. Practice makes perfect so keep on keeping on.
Critique: TMNT Michelangelo
In the original comic books, Michelangelo was initially depicted as fun-loving, carefree, and, while not as aggressive as Raphael, always ready to fight. He is much more serious-natured in the comic book than in the film incarnations, which have labeled his character a permanent "dude" talking pre-teen. It was Michelangelo's one-shot in this series that fleshed out most of the traits that have become synonymous with the character, such as his playfulness, empathy, and easygoing nature. In the one-shot story, Michelangelo adopts a stray cat (which he names Klunk) and also stops thieves from stealing toys meant for orphaned children.
After their defeat at the hands of the Foot Clan the Turtles, Splinter, April O'Neil, and Casey Jones retreat to a farm house in Northampton, Massachusetts which used to belong to Casey's grandmother. While there, April is worried to note that Michelangelo is not himself. He spends his days in the barn taking out his aggression on a punching bag. A sce
TMNT OC Callie Castellan
Name - Callie Castellan
Nickname - Cal
Gender - Female
Age - Appearance As A Teenager Age Unknown
Race - Half Kraang and Half Heiwa'Teki
Hair Color - Short and Pink
Eye Color - Lavender
Additional Note - Has Pointy Elf Like Ears
Love Interest - Craig The Kraang
Power - Telepath and Shapeshifter
Likes - Freedom
Dislikes - Tight Spaces
Friends - Craig, The Turtles, April O'Neil, Casey Jones and Splinter
Family - N/A
Quote - "The future belongs to those who believe in the power of their dreams."
Back Story -
Changes Will Be Made As Character Develops
TMNT Kraang OC: Craig
Name - Craig
Nickname - N/A
Gender - Male
Age - Unknown
Race - Half Kraang and Half Human
Hair Color - N/A
Eye Color - Green/Yellow
Additional Note - Can Talk Only Telepathically
Love Interest - Callie Castellan
Power - Telepath
Likes - Callie Castellan
Dislikes - Watching Callie Get Hurt
Friends - Callie Castellan
Family - The Kraang
Quote - N/A
Back Story -
Changes Will Be Made As Character Develops
RP FRIEND FINDER APPLICATION1) Hello. Might we have your name? A username is nice but if you have a nickname you would prefer to go by please tell us.
Preferred Nickname(s): Sheri
2) What do you like to roleplay? Is there a specific series or theme you like?
(Series example: Sonic, Glee, Pokemon)
(Theme example: wolf, high-school, fantasy, romance)
Series/Fandoms That I most like to RP:
- Xiaolin Showdown
- TMNT (Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles, preferably 2003 version, but 2007 and 2012 are also acceptable. ^^)
- SWAT Kats
- Sym-Bionic Titan
- Marvel (I mostly only consider family-like relationships between any canon characters and my OC's rather than romantic when it comes to this fandom, unless it's an OCxOC situation or a younger or second generation.)
- DC (Young Justice, Teen Titans)
- Soul Eater
Theme(s): CanonxOC, sometimes OCxOC if I know the character. Romance, Action, fantasy (Maybe some horror/gore depending on the RP.)
3) Do you create your own OCs?
We are never ever getting back togetherIsabella's P.O.V
She had a boyfriend but it was not Phineas her darling. She had seen the kiss. It pained her. But she had a boyfriend. She had not the heart to stand there and watch them. So she had fallen for his brother Ferb. They did it well but in the last time he had changed. He had sent a long look for Vanessa. She did not at first start but in recent times had changed. He had dumped her long ago. But he had said that he regretted. He wanted her back. He had managed to get it. But he had broken up with her. Only after a month after he said he was sorry and wanted her back. It was always vont to hear him say it. Her heart had fallen. But she showed that the boy who had dumped her at first, she had feelings for. She fit out through her window. it rained. A tear slipped out saw her. But she showed that it was stupid to do this to him. But she had no choice. She loved him but she could not be there to see the kiss. But what she did not know was that they had broken up. Isabella was
I can stand and I can fightI can stand and I can fight
and I'm not giving up tonight.
I'm strong and weak
my faith is at it's peek
I will protect I will defend
I will care I will mend
he is here to guide me through
he is here cause he loves you too
Is it an angel?And so there I was, lying on the cold ruthless ground, every mussel in my body ached as the rain pounded at my wounds. Every drop of water felt like the wasp's sting. My soul screamed out to me, trying to escape this blasted world. The very life I had left was giving up, it was pointless. My breaths shortened at an uneven pace, my head throbbed and my skin burned. I could hardly open my eye lids, they fell like an unsupported bridge. A tear rolled down my cheek with a light accent, it felt like all hope was lost. I was alone, Nobody around to hear my cries. As much as I wanted to scream my being would not let the sound escape my lips.
Then I could hear footsteps, my eyes unwilling to open to see who it was. He picked me up in his arms, and I could feel a touch on my lips. He carried me away, but by now I had fallen asleep.
When I awakened I was in a strange room, no one was there, just as before when I was alone. But if I really was alone, who picked me up
Poems are made by Fools
Poems are made by fools like them,
By poets who have no taste for fun.
Poems are made by fools like they,
By poets who seem to chase the day.
Poems are made by fools like everybody,
By poets who seem to understand fully.
Poems are made by fools like us,
By poets who feel the tender rush.
Poems are made by fools like I,
By poets who have mounds of time.
Poems are made by fools like me,
And like me, they are rarely ever seen.
List of all the phobias I think I haveAfter I've seen this
I wanted to look on Wikipedia and see what kind of fears I seem to have
Anthropophobia (it depends)
Panphobia (I'm a scaredy cat)
Xenophobia (mostly strangers)
So here they all go. Looked them up and see what phobias they are. I would suggest that you look them up on Wikipedia.
I have something to talk about (April and Venus)Judged on what I/we have seen so far from April in the newest series of TMNT, I think Nick is giving her many traits from a old character: Venus De Milo (which can explain why some people don't like the new April very much).
It can be possible that Nick is basing most of April's new abilities and powers from Venus. Just think about it: Venus was a replacement for April in the next mutation series and also April's name comes from the Latin "aprīlis" meaning "of the month of the goddess, Venus". They both also have similar powers that are linked to the world/universe (April with her mental energy/physic powers and Venus with her Yin and Yang power/chi magic), they are both love interest for the turtles (though Donnie is the only known turtle that has a crush on her while almost all the turtles in the next mutation series was a love interest for Venus), they both use T
Am I forgivenIt came to me, black as the night.
taking my pain and giving me a fight
I trained for this my entire life
took the hurt locked it away even in all this strife
I breathe in and out each day
but the more I work the more I pray
give me strength to be a man
in his life this was his plan
growing me like a late flower
now it's me that it will devour
I can't be who I wanted
now his memory is unwanted
I seem to fall more than most
with the visits from my father's ghost
"be a man like I taught you to"
he'll say as if I never knew
"be strong and never give up,
there's more than one way to fill a cup"
I'd smile and look away
now I see what he had to say
I should have taken in his every word
instead I thought it was absurd
"how can a boy become a man
not here not in japan
nothing will influence me
nothing can change who I am and what I'll be
now I see I was all to wrong
I finally see what he was teaching me all along
"I'm sorry father for all I've done
I hope you're still proud of your son"
Group Critique: TMNTAprilOneil
The group TMNTAprilOneil is run by FlashyFashionFraud, it has approximately 180 members with 190 watchers, this group has eleven admins, counting the founder and was founded six months ago with over 4,000 page views. It currently has thirteen folders, counting featured. The rules to the group are simple, be polite, be positive, put the right pictures in the appropriate folders and have fun. The group is dedicated to the fifth turtle, April O'Neil, from Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles.
The icon is the face of the group, and this icon was talentedly created. It grabs ones attention though I must say it flashes by a little to fats, personally I would slow it down a bit, give someone time to take in each persona of April.
The name of the group is also important, sadly another April group called TMNT-AprilONeil was created a month before FlashyFashionFraud's group and the name is just the same minus a dash, some may mistake this for copping or uncreative.
five hour energyi suppose
last week was only an aftershock
of the earthquake you were before.
this place used to vibrate
with metal strings and melodic,
testimonies to life,
emitting coffee-scented moods
and the burn of it too.
i had memorized the
sounds of silence,
i couldn't help but relish it.
no longer had i known
the sounds of folk
and scent of mocha-
you became nothing more
than an echo of the laughter
i so desperately needed to hear again.
then the echoes got louder,
bouncing ferociously off the walls
to be made manifest
i walked into your room
expecting exactly what i found-
an unmade bed,
and an empty beer
(the one that you insisted you needed
just days ago).
i pressed my nose
into the pillow
for incense and cologne and starbucks
to penetrate my mind
and thinking fervently
i already know
what a clean sheet smells like."
how strong an aftershock can be,
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